One of the feedback comments I received was that I could focus more on art throughout my paper. I have a lot about physical volunteering but my podmates pointed out that a lot of the prompt has to do with if art is a waste of time. I agree with them and I plan on adding more about art throughout each of my paragraphs and I plan to add more from Southan as well to make it more of a well rounded paper. Another comment of feedback I got was that I should add more quotes to my paper as well. I think this was a good idea to make some of my paragraphs better support the claims I am making. With more quotes I would also able to add a barclay’s graph into my paper which is needed as well. I final feedback comment I received was to reorganize some of my body paragraphs to make the paper flow better. I thought this was a really great idea, as sometimes when I write my thoughts can get jumbled and out of order. I started writing a paragraphs about the EA’s towards the end and this comment made me read my paper over again and realized that that paragraph would fit in a much better spot towards the beginning of the paper.